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    Dakota
    @dakota

    @urwen-starial

    I LOVE this!! ❤❤❤ Being a writer of lyrical poetry, this poem has a lot of musical ‘feel’, if you will. It has some irregularity in the ryhtmn but that only lends to the ‘brokeness’ if the poem.

    I don’t think I have any other criticisms!! Good job👍

     

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #105779
    Urwen Starial
    @urwen-starial

      @dakota

      Thanks! 🙂 I like the rhythmic flow of poetry too.

      "Peace in our time. Imagine that."

      #105788
      Emberynus The Dragonslayer
      @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

      @urwen-starial

      *screams*

      BEAUTIFUL!!! I love it!

      Sleep doesn't help if it's your soul that's tired.

      #109356

      Here is a poem I wrote yesterday. 🙂 @evelyn @k-a-grey @libby @h-jones

      sleepy

       

      the blankets are

      heavy on my chest

       

      so heavy

       

      heat fuzzes over me

       

      the monochrome

      with streaks of color

      at the lines

      fast-forward

      fast forward

      at the forefront

      of my mind

       

      but the round browns overwhelm,

      puddling through the cracks

       

      the warmth strums

      through my muscles

       

      my mind is in

      a lilac mood

       

      if my brain was busier

      it would notice the galaxies

      behind my eyes

       

      but my body is

      immoveable,

      soft,

      vulnerable,

      in the warm

      blackness

      Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

      #109381
      Evelyn
      @evelyn

      @emma-starr Lovely my friend. I adore the image of the galaxies stored behind eyes. <3

      #109415

      @evelyn Thank you!! That’s one of my favorite images too. :)))

      Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

      #110856
      Knowledgeful Butterfly
      @e_elaine_soup5

      We alone did face

      The night within.

      A lonely shroud,

      Like an empty dream.

       

      A foreboding shadow

      Of flowered, unseen truth

      Echoes with cold & silent fear

      And screams like our bitter sky.

       

      Broken  lightning,

      But whispered thunder

      Dread between unknown confusion,

      Which murmurs through young power.

      i could've gone outside to take a walk, but i know that i wouldn't've come back

      #111692

      @e_elaine_soup5 Cool poem! 🙂 I especially like the images in the last stanza. “Broken lightning” and “whispered thunder” = perfection.

      For feedback… “We alone did face” seems a little awkward to me, unless you’re trying for an old English type of vibe. “We faced the dark alone” is a lot easier to read/follow.

      Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

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