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    I LOVE this!! ❤❤❤ Being a writer of lyrical poetry, this poem has a lot of musical ‘feel’, if you will. It has some irregularity in the ryhtmn but that only lends to the ‘brokeness’ if the poem.

    I don’t think I have any other criticisms!! Good job👍


    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    Urwen Starial


    Thanks! 🙂 I like the rhythmic flow of poetry too.

    “Tears sparkle like fallen stars, the world at our fingertips, We didn’t know, It wasn't happiness.

    Emberynus The Dragonslayer



    BEAUTIFUL!!! I love it!

    Sold souls and dead promises


    Here is a poem I wrote yesterday. 🙂 @evelyn @k-a-grey @libby @h-jones



    the blankets are

    heavy on my chest


    so heavy


    heat fuzzes over me


    the monochrome

    with streaks of color

    at the lines


    fast forward

    at the forefront

    of my mind


    but the round browns overwhelm,

    puddling through the cracks


    the warmth strums

    through my muscles


    my mind is in

    a lilac mood


    if my brain was busier

    it would notice the galaxies

    behind my eyes


    but my body is




    in the warm


    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂


    @emma-starr Lovely my friend. I adore the image of the galaxies stored behind eyes. <3


    @evelyn Thank you!! That’s one of my favorite images too. :)))

    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂

    Knowledgeful Butterfly

    We alone did face

    The night within.

    A lonely shroud,

    Like an empty dream.


    A foreboding shadow

    Of flowered, unseen truth

    Echoes with cold & silent fear

    And screams like our bitter sky.


    Broken  lightning,

    But whispered thunder

    Dread between unknown confusion,

    Which murmurs through young power.

    i could've gone outside to take a walk, but i know that i wouldn't've come back


    @e_elaine_soup5 Cool poem! 🙂 I especially like the images in the last stanza. “Broken lightning” and “whispered thunder” = perfection.

    For feedback… “We alone did face” seems a little awkward to me, unless you’re trying for an old English type of vibe. “We faced the dark alone” is a lot easier to read/follow.

    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂

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