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  • #105775
    Dakota
    @dakota

    @urwen-starial

    I LOVE this!! ❤❤❤ Being a writer of lyrical poetry, this poem has a lot of musical ‘feel’, if you will. It has some irregularity in the ryhtmn but that only lends to the ‘brokeness’ if the poem.

    I don’t think I have any other criticisms!! Good job👍

     

    Psalm 119:11
    Your word I have hidden in my heart,
    That I might not sin against You.

    #105779
    Urwen Starial
    @urwen-starial

    @dakota

    Thanks! 🙂 I like the rhythmic flow of poetry too.

    “Tears sparkle like fallen stars, the world at our fingertips, We didn’t know, It wasn't happiness.

    #105788
    Emberynus The Dragonslayer
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    @urwen-starial

    *screams*

    BEAUTIFUL!!! I love it!

    Sold souls and dead promises

    #109356

    Here is a poem I wrote yesterday. 🙂 @evelyn @k-a-grey @libby @h-jones

    sleepy

     

    the blankets are

    heavy on my chest

     

    so heavy

     

    heat fuzzes over me

     

    the monochrome

    with streaks of color

    at the lines

    fast-forward

    fast forward

    at the forefront

    of my mind

     

    but the round browns overwhelm,

    puddling through the cracks

     

    the warmth strums

    through my muscles

     

    my mind is in

    a lilac mood

     

    if my brain was busier

    it would notice the galaxies

    behind my eyes

     

    but my body is

    immoveable,

    soft,

    vulnerable,

    in the warm

    blackness

    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

    #109381
    Evelyn
    @evelyn

    @emma-starr Lovely my friend. I adore the image of the galaxies stored behind eyes. <3

    #109415

    @evelyn Thank you!! That’s one of my favorite images too. :)))

    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

    #110856
    Knowledgeful Butterfly
    @e_elaine_soup5

    We alone did face

    The night within.

    A lonely shroud,

    Like an empty dream.

     

    A foreboding shadow

    Of flowered, unseen truth

    Echoes with cold & silent fear

    And screams like our bitter sky.

     

    Broken  lightning,

    But whispered thunder

    Dread between unknown confusion,

    Which murmurs through young power.

    i could've gone outside to take a walk, but i know that i wouldn't've come back

    #111692

    @e_elaine_soup5 Cool poem! 🙂 I especially like the images in the last stanza. “Broken lightning” and “whispered thunder” = perfection.

    For feedback… “We alone did face” seems a little awkward to me, unless you’re trying for an old English type of vibe. “We faced the dark alone” is a lot easier to read/follow.

    Spreading God's love until I can see seven billion smiles. 🙂 https://sevenbillionsmiles.home.blog

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