Feedback on article on developing magic and tech

[Daeus Lamb]

Hi guys,

I’m developing an article for Story Embers on Developing magic and tech that transforms stories.

I’ve mostly completed the article, though it need some small additions (like a conclusion, lol.)

But I have this nagging feeling I’m missing something. Anyone want to peek at it and offer feedback on how I could make it better?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jTkW5jffD1B0vFtaZTyuS-TeuzHYY0yhQrxD_6wO5CU/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks!

 

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