May 30, 2020 at 8:50 pm #114148
Some people have asked what I write about, so I decided to post one of my short stories on here for y’all to read. @kimlikesart @eitan @beth20 @claire-h @kristianne-hassman I write about funny little things that have happened in my life, and I (of course) dramatize them immensely to make them interesting to read, and to bring out the laughter hiding inside of everyone who reads them. It’s great! 😉 😀
Anyone is welcome to read this and then give me their opinion, whether good or bad. 😉 I want to improve in writing these short stories, and there’s no better way than having a group read and critique them. Thanks, and enjoy your reading!
A Fishy Tale
One day my best friend Lydia and I were sitting in her bedroom, trying to think of what we could do to pass the time, when I had a stroke of genius (which turned out to be a stroke of stupidity).
“Why don’t we make a house for your fish?” I asked, staring at her tank.
She glanced up from where she sat beside me and pondered the suggestion. “What would we make it out of?”
“I don’t know, an old cereal box and tape?” My eleven-year-old mind didn’t think of the consequences that would follow.
She nodded. “That might work. How about I get the tape and scissors, and you ask Mom for the box.”
We set out to find the treasure, and after doing so, we met once again in Lydia’s bedroom, positively delighted by our plan. We set to work right away, cutting the cereal box into pieces, forming a rough square shape, and taping the pieces into place. (Quite the solid structure, I’m sure!) It took us a while to get something that was up to our standards, but when we finally did, we examined it with satisfaction.
I stated the obvious. “Now we just need to put it into the tank.”
Picking the fish house up in both hands, I strode to the other side of the room with Lydia right behind me. I set the cardboard house down on the dresser so I could push up my sleeves, and after doing so, carefully submerged the house in the water. You might be able to guess what happened when I lifted my hand back out of the water, but at the age of eleven, I didn’t think of all those small, though just as important, details.
The house floated.
Now, most people would think it painfully obvious that cardboard floats, but neither Lydia nor I had thought about it.
We stared at it bobbing up and down on the top of the water for a minute before Lydia spoke.
“How are we gonna make it stay at the bottom?”
I shrugged with frustration before going back to the bed and plopping down at the edge. “I don’t know.”
As we sat beside each other yet again, pondering what we could do, I was struck once again with an amazing idea. (Or once again, another idiotic one.)
“All we have to do is put one of your shells on top of the house, and the weight will hold it down,” I stated.
“Oh, ya, that’s a great idea!” Lydia agreed, and we both got up and walked over to the fish tank.
We figured out after a while that one person would have to hold the house down on the bottom of the tank, while the other placed the large shell on top of it. It worked, and we rejoiced in our victory. Lydia’s two younger brothers came in to see what we were up to, and they joined us in admiring the new fish house.
Time passed as we kids occupied ourselves with other activities, and when Lydia and I returned to the bedroom to get something, we were in for a shock.
Her fish was floating on the top of the tank.
* * * * * *
It took us a while to get her fish into another bowl and pour all the water from the tank into the sink, since we had decided we should clean the tank of evidence of the murder. We had seen pieces of tape floating at the top of the water, and it didn’t take us long to realize what had killed Lydia’s fish.
The fish house.
Tape and cardboard have tons of chemicals, of course, and we assumed they had poisoned the fish. As horrible as it was, it was pretty amusing, and we cleaned out the tank while chuckling at our stupidity.
We had placed the limp fish in a bowl with some water as we cleaned the tank inside and out, and when we turned our attention back to the unfortunate creature, we were surprised to discover it swimming around.
“I guess it’s not dead after all,” Lydia commented, and we refilled the tank with water after putting all the rocks and shells in the bottom.
However, we were wise enough to not put the fish house back in.
After placing the now-living fish back into its home, we sighed in relief that there hadn’t been a murder after all.
But, to our great dismay, later that day we found the fish floating on the top of the water, definitely dead this time. Definitely not acting like last time. Lydia ended up flushing it down the toilet, but I still think we should have buried it so we could have gone to the grave to pay our respects.
This event has impacted me in many ways, and it will continue to, as I repeatedly realize how fragile and meaningful life really is. Even the life of a fish.
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienMay 30, 2020 at 8:54 pm #114149
Oh, lol. I forgot to tag you! 😀 Super weird, considering what the story is and all… 😉 Lol. I can’t believe I forgot! Especially since I promised you I’d tag you when I posted this.
*shakes my head while rolling my eyes* Who would have thought?
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienMay 31, 2020 at 11:18 am #114157Alabama Rose@bama-rose
@olivia 🤣 That’s totally fine!! Hahah.
I love this story! Great job! 🙂
Courage, dear heart ~ AslanMay 31, 2020 at 12:35 pm #114164Eitan@eitan
I will find time in the next few days to read it!
You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.May 31, 2020 at 12:44 pm #114166Beth Darlene@beth20
Awesome, I’ll read this today! 🙂
Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!May 31, 2020 at 12:57 pm #114168Beth Darlene@beth20
Haha, that was amazing! Really liked it, love stories like this!
Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!May 31, 2020 at 6:49 pm #114169Arindown (Gracie)@arindown
I love stories about real life. This one is so funny! Poor fish.
Maybe I’ll have to post a story sometime about me, and my sister’s carnivorous duck….😉
Not all who wander are lost.June 1, 2020 at 10:43 am #114190Alabama Rose@bama-rose
Haha, carnivorous duck?! That sounds hilarious! 😂
Courage, dear heart ~ AslanJune 2, 2020 at 6:53 pm #114278Kimmi@kimlikesart
I just realized I didn’t comment!
I read this the day you posted, sorry. It’s good, and real-life experiences can indeed be funny.
God told you to go; He did not say you would return.June 2, 2020 at 7:21 pm #114279
I know it’s fine, I just found it funny. 😉 😀
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienJune 2, 2020 at 7:23 pm #114280
@eitan Oh, it’s totally fine. No pressure! 🙂 I just posted this for fun and I meant for people to enjoy it whenever they had time. So you don’t have any obligation to read this!
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienJune 2, 2020 at 7:45 pm #114282
@beth20 I’m glad you like it! Ya, I like reading stories like this, but I like writing them even more. And all it takes is a bit of a mess up in life, a sense of humour, and exaggeration. 😉
Lots and lots of exaggeration!
- This reply was modified 10 months, 1 week ago by Olivia Catherine.
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienJune 2, 2020 at 7:51 pm #114284
@arindown Ya, I never thought of it much before, but man, that poor fish went through a LOT!!!!!
*Bursts out laughing*
That may have sounded cold hearted, but I have a feeling you all know where I’m coming from now, after reading this. Lol. I’m not as bad as I may seem… hopefully…
Ya, you totally should post that story!!!!! I’m working on another story right now, and it’s also pretty funny. I’ll probably post it just so a few people can get laughs out of it as well. Lol. That’s basically my goal in life: making people laugh. No kidding, either! I’ve decided (though it may sound weird that I know what I want on my grave stone), I want my grave stone to have the normal stuff, like date of birth, death, etc. but at the end, I want it to say, Forever Laughing. Suites me well, I think. 😉 😛
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR TolkienJune 2, 2020 at 9:20 pm #114293claire@claire-h
Thanks for tagging me! This was an entertaining read for sure. 😂 Yes, please share your next one with us too!
a flower does not think of competing with the flower next to it.
it just blooms.June 2, 2020 at 10:08 pm #114305
Oh, I’m glad you liked it so much! 🙂 I’m never sure what people are gonna think of my writing, but I guess how can you go wrong with a funny story? Lol
Ya, I’m planning on posting the next one when I finish it.
Even the smallest person can change the course of the future. -JRR Tolkien
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