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    Banana Peacock Warrior
    @banana-peacock-warrior

      🙂 😀

      @emberynus-the-dragonslayer: Thank you! And no prob… there’s nothing I’d rather do. (Plus, standing up for what I believe in beats school, any day! 😉 )

      “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
      ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

      #93556

      K. A. Grey
      @k-a-grey

        @banana-peacock-warrior  Wow, powerful poetry!  I almost got chills reading it.   I enjoyed #2 and #5, #2 especially.

        I think one thing you may want to consider changing is the prologue.  It’s a good thought, but the rhyming seems just a little… forced?  It takes a little away from the rest of the poems, which contain powerful images.  Maybe consider a “call to action” type line or focus in on a baby’s heartbeat — something that really grabs your attention and pulls you in.

        Otherwise, awesome job on addressing this issue through poetry!  I think more people should realize the horrors of abortion and stand up against it.

        "Atticus, he was real nice. . . .”
        “Most people are, Scout, when you finally see them.”

        #93561

        Kayla Skywriter
        @kayla-skywriter

          @banana-peacock-warrior

          I’ve only got 11 chapters in and I’m working on a major plot rewrite, but if you still want to read it just ask and I’ll post the link.

          How we chose to fight is just as important as what we fight for

          #93582

          Emberynus The Dragonslayer
          @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

            @banana-peacock-warrior 😉 go girl!!

            You can't live for long living for nothing-Hector Griffin

            #93649

            Ariel Ashira
            @ashira

            @banana-peacock-warrior Ooh, those are so touching and sweeping!  There is often little parts where it feels forced a little, but overall they are very nice.  I love the message!

            I wrote a couple abortion poems when I was younger…

            "No matter how much it hurts, how dark it gets, or how hard you fall, you are never out of the fight."

            #93679

            Banana Peacock Warrior
            @banana-peacock-warrior

              @k-a-grey: Thank you! And thanks for the tip- I’ll try re-writing that prologue with some stronger images.

              @kayla-skywriter: Yes, I’d love to read it! I’ve always wanted to write my own STORY about abortion, but seems I can only write fiction stories and poems come more naturally for this stuff. So… yeah- please!

              @emberynus-the-dragonslayer: *fist-bump*

              @ashira: Thanks! Kk… I’ll keep that in mind editing. I think I just need a thesaurus… 😉

              You did? That’s cool! I’m not the only one, LOL! Did your poems address a certain aspect or abortion in general?

              “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
              ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

              #93689

              Emberynus The Dragonslayer
              @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

                @banana-peacock-warrior

                *fist-bump* 😉

                You can't live for long living for nothing-Hector Griffin

                #93695

                Kayla Skywriter
                @kayla-skywriter
                  #93804

                  Banana Peacock Warrior
                  @banana-peacock-warrior

                    @kayla-skywriter: Awesome, thanks!!

                    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
                    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

                    #94106

                    Banana Peacock Warrior
                    @banana-peacock-warrior

                      @k-a-grey @abigail-rebekah @holly-anne @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @kayla-skywriter @ashira  @nuetrobolt

                      Hi, all! So, I was advised to add stronger images in my prologue. So- I changed it! I wanted a few opinions on how this one sounds compared to the first prologue…

                      Prologue:
                      I am hearing silent screams
                      From children with no choice.
                      God also calls my name:
                      “Time to give them a voice!”

                      Thoughts? 🙂 Thanks!

                      “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
                      ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

                      #94118

                      Holly Anne
                      @holly-anne

                        @banana-peacock-warrior

                        Yes, I love that beginning. Definitely fits it better 🙂

                        "You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling" (Inception)
                        Composer, Writer, Sarcastic 😉

                        #94124

                        Abigail Rebekah
                        @abigail-rebekah

                          @banana-peacock-warrior

                          I really like this one 🙂 It definitely is better.

                          ~ Laugh. Drink Coffee. Smile. And Write ~

                          #94130

                          Emberynus The Dragonslayer
                          @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

                            @banana-peacock-warrior awesome! I like them both, but I think I would agree that this one is better matched! Keep writing! You’re style and message are awesome!

                            You can't live for long living for nothing-Hector Griffin

                            #94138

                            Kayla Skywriter
                            @kayla-skywriter

                              I like it, very strong.

                              How we chose to fight is just as important as what we fight for

                              #94254

                              Banana Peacock Warrior
                              @banana-peacock-warrior

                                @holly-anne, @abigail-rebekah, @emberynus-the-dragonslayer, @kayla-skywriter:

                                Awesome, thanks! Muchas gracias for the tips and help, all! Los aprecio a todos! 🙂

                                “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
                                ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

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