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  • #93479
    Kenzie Pimpo
    @banana-peacock-warrior

    🙂 😀


    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer
    : Thank you! And no prob… there’s nothing I’d rather do. (Plus, standing up for what I believe in beats school, any day! 😉 )

    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

    #93556
    K. A. Grey
    @k-a-grey

    @banana-peacock-warrior  Wow, powerful poetry!  I almost got chills reading it.   I enjoyed #2 and #5, #2 especially.

    I think one thing you may want to consider changing is the prologue.  It’s a good thought, but the rhyming seems just a little… forced?  It takes a little away from the rest of the poems, which contain powerful images.  Maybe consider a “call to action” type line or focus in on a baby’s heartbeat — something that really grabs your attention and pulls you in.

    Otherwise, awesome job on addressing this issue through poetry!  I think more people should realize the horrors of abortion and stand up against it.

    "Atticus, he was real nice. . . .”
    “Most people are, Scout, when you finally see them.”

    #93561
    Kayla Skywriter
    @kayla-skywriter

    @banana-peacock-warrior

    I’ve only got 11 chapters in and I’m working on a major plot rewrite, but if you still want to read it just ask and I’ll post the link.

    How we chose to fight is just as important as what we fight for

    #93582
    Emberynus The Dragonslayer
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    @banana-peacock-warrior 😉 go girl!!

    Sold souls and dead promises

    #93649
    Ariel Ashira
    @ashira

    @banana-peacock-warrior Ooh, those are so touching and sweeping!  There is often little parts where it feels forced a little, but overall they are very nice.  I love the message!

    I wrote a couple abortion poems when I was younger…

    "No matter how much it hurts, how dark it gets, or how hard you fall, you are never out of the fight."

    #93679
    Kenzie Pimpo
    @banana-peacock-warrior

    @k-a-grey: Thank you! And thanks for the tip- I’ll try re-writing that prologue with some stronger images.


    @kayla-skywriter
    : Yes, I’d love to read it! I’ve always wanted to write my own STORY about abortion, but seems I can only write fiction stories and poems come more naturally for this stuff. So… yeah- please!


    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer
    : *fist-bump*


    @ashira
    : Thanks! Kk… I’ll keep that in mind editing. I think I just need a thesaurus… 😉

    You did? That’s cool! I’m not the only one, LOL! Did your poems address a certain aspect or abortion in general?

    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

    #93689
    Emberynus The Dragonslayer
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    @banana-peacock-warrior

    *fist-bump* 😉

    Sold souls and dead promises

    #93695
    Kayla Skywriter
    @kayla-skywriter
    #93804
    Kenzie Pimpo
    @banana-peacock-warrior

    @kayla-skywriter: Awesome, thanks!!

    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

    #94106
    Kenzie Pimpo
    @banana-peacock-warrior

    @k-a-grey @abigail-rebekah @holly-anne @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @kayla-skywriter @ashira  @nuetrobolt

    Hi, all! So, I was advised to add stronger images in my prologue. So- I changed it! I wanted a few opinions on how this one sounds compared to the first prologue…

    Prologue:
    I am hearing silent screams
    From children with no choice.
    God also calls my name:
    “Time to give them a voice!”

    Thoughts? 🙂 Thanks!

    • This reply was modified 1 year, 10 months ago by Kenzie Pimpo.

    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

    #94118
    Holly Anne
    @holly-anne

    @banana-peacock-warrior

    Yes, I love that beginning. Definitely fits it better 🙂

    "You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger darling" (Inception)
    Composer, Writer, Sarcastic 😉

    #94124
    Abigail Rebekah
    @abigail-rebekah

    @banana-peacock-warrior

    I really like this one 🙂 It definitely is better.

    ~ Laugh. Drink Coffee. Smile. And Write ~

    #94130
    Emberynus The Dragonslayer
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    @banana-peacock-warrior awesome! I like them both, but I think I would agree that this one is better matched! Keep writing! You’re style and message are awesome!

    Sold souls and dead promises

    #94138
    Kayla Skywriter
    @kayla-skywriter

    I like it, very strong.

    How we chose to fight is just as important as what we fight for

    #94254
    Kenzie Pimpo
    @banana-peacock-warrior

    @holly-anne, @abigail-rebekah, @emberynus-the-dragonslayer, @kayla-skywriter:

    Awesome, thanks! Muchas gracias for the tips and help, all! Los aprecio a todos! 🙂

    “When anxiety was great within me, your consolation brought me joy.”
    ‭‭Psalm‬ ‭94:19‬ ‭

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