@quinn-ofallon Here’s what I found.
If it wasn’t for the full moon above, the sprawling pagoda-like building would cast the whole courtyard in shadow, dwarfing the barracks lined on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.
dwarfing the barracks on either side of the walled Watcher precinct.
dwarfing the barracks lining either side of the walled Watcher precinct.
A decent enough plan, but with one pitfall–every heretic tries it, which means I have extensive practice cutting off anyone who tries that route.
I would split this into two sentences rather than one joined by an em dash.
As I run, I strain for a glimpse over the battlements..
(There are two periods here)
Panice tightens my throat.
And that’s all! 🙂
Writer, illustrator, Parimi Alcan
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