@sir-leeds I love your poem!
I do see what Story Ember meant now about the embellishments. You’re not flaunting a bunch of different poetry techniques in this poem (but you do use vivid language). Also, the poem’s character is a child, so there is power in the simplicity of the character’s voice. 🙂
I love the ending lines:
“And the lonely lamp posts, the only trace of my friends
I could find was the emptiness around my bike.”
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