@parker Thank you so much! You are so encouraging! I’m so glad you liked it!
I know, I use a lot of adverbs. Which ones were you thinking?
@h-jones Wow, thank you! I try so hard to make readers feel attached to my characters, but I never actually thought I could succeed at that – it’s so hard! I’m so happy you liked Sergio, too. I got attached to him, thought up a background story for why he is the way he is, and because I understand him so well, I’m really sad for him, too.
Ah, yes, I do have a problem with big words. I type them down and don’t even think about it sometimes. I think you’re right. And I will definitely change that. Would “prison” or “cell” be a better word? Or is there another word that would be better?
I love the parts you liked as well – the frostbitten finger part was probably one of my favorites to write. 🙂
As for the quote, yes, I love the speech! So powerful and motivating!
Thank you both so much for your comments! They made me smile so much. I love any critique because, even though I passed on the assignment, I know I can do better and want this to be tippety-top polished. Thanks guys! 🙂
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