I think this is a good start for a poem! I like the short line lengths and the fact that you have parallelism with the -ing words throughout the poem! Did you have any specific concerns about this portion of the poem? Will there be additional stanzas?
(Oh, just in case you were wondering who this person is who just came barging into the thread, I’m Bree.)
- This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by E.B. Raulands.
To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.