Reading the original post of your book idea blurb, I didn’t get the idea that Kyle was a villain. You could argue he turns into an antagonist, perhaps, but even then it’s debatable. He presents a trial and struggle for the protagonist… yes. But I don’t think you need to make him evil to make your story work. From what it sounded in the blurb, Kyle sticks with her after she is blinded, but then dumps her while or after the camp.
Here is an idea that sounds very natural to me in that circumstance. Have Kyle be the regular boyfriend you find out in the real world. Your protagonist loses her eyesight, and Kyle becomes the supporting boyfriend during that (with perhaps the strain and stress of taking care of her showing in certain ways). Then she goes off to camp. TO go into Kyle’s perspective… the stress and pressure of taking care of her is gone. He’s free. He enjoys his freedom and that surprises him and begins dreading her return. He finds someone else on campus or perhaps just reunites with old friends he didn’t have time for before because he was so busy taking care of her. The longer she’s gone, the more he enjoys his freedom and the more he dreads her return, leading to the desire to break it off. If that makes sense? Nothing big or evil or spectacular, but very very natural and realistic (at least, in my mind…)
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