Awesome! So glad that was helpful!
I was also leaning against using direct thought. I had been using it early in my chapters to start them off with a further physic distance, and then moving into indirect thought, but I’m not convinced that is necessary.
I think in that specific instance, it would be more important to be consistent than to work on the psychic distance. I don’t have much experience with it, since I’m writing in a fairly constant, close, first-person perspective. Still, I think it would be jarring if you switched from direct thought to indirect thought in the middle.
It was very interesting/amusing to see my exact same mistakes in someone else’s writing XD I hope that saved you some trial and error XD
Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?