@noah-cochran Arghh, Prof. this is like perfect. Like my favorite style. Honestly. I love how much pain there is, how much we are inside the character’s heads, and how much they’re “rubbing” on each-other. And the setting… If you even need someone to read your manuscript, I volunteer.😄
Anyywayyy…as for the voices. I agree with Rose that Rolant’s was the best, but I also liked Jolene’s. I can’t think of any suggestions at the moment though, I’ll have to read it again.
Not all those who wander are lost.