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Hi! I just stumbled across this thread today (sorry for being late to the party *embarrassed grin*). I really liked everyone’s suggestions, and agree with what they’ve said. If it also helps, maybe consider mentioning that two of these three characters already like someone else. I’ve noticed that someone suggested the girl tease the boys about ‘pretty girls’; what if one or both boys have mentioned they ‘like’ certain other girls from the village? (you don’t have to go into detail, or even bring those girls in as characters. It could just be a passing comment).
If I may ask, is this a YA story, or a MG story?
(I hope this was helpful!) 🙂
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