@ajstoryteller I’ll get back to you with my character, I thought I’d let @erynne and anyone try who wanted to first.

@gbfruitbat

I want him to have that kind of personality, and be one of those quieter, polite, super nice guys but I also don’t want him to be unrealistically perfect or too effeminate if you know what I mean??

That’s a familiar problem XD For some reason, it’s always the love interest too for me… XD

I think something that might help is i…[Read more]

@noah-cochran

Greetings!! I have returned victorious from my conquest of the hostile lands of exams! (Well hopefully victorious, I still have to get the results XD)

Do you use direct, italicized thought (where first person pronouns are used)? At first, I used basically none, but the more I looked at popular books, the more I see it used, and am…

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Awesome! I’m glad it helped. 🙂

@r-m-archer

Thanks that was actually very helpful!  I’ll try to incorporate some of those ideas.  It’s one of my favorite character types too😉

I’ve known some guys who fit that description and are still definitely masculine, and in trying to break it down I think the main thing is that they do a good job of filling their biblical role as men. They do exemplify gentleness and self-control, they’re polite, but they’re also protectors, they’re not afraid to do the hard things, they often…[Read more]

Been working on developing this man lately. Maybe you guys can help a bit.

@emma-walker

oooh she’s pretty! sorry I haven’t been on in a while

1) Name: Angelica or something elegant sounding

2) Age: late teens, early twenties

3) Career/Role in Story: side character or main character

4) Personality: Rather intense. She puts passion into everything she does. Tends to be serious most of the time and is very perceptive…[Read more]

Heyyyyyyy allllllllllll!
Things have been crazy for me, but I do have a new character for y’all!!
( @erynne  XDXD)

soooooo yeah.
i don’t know much about her yet, so…. Yeah…

OH SNAP I REMEMBERED SOMETHING

XD it’s okay I’ll do math and calculate her age later.

anywhooooo

Here she is!!!

Great questions! Personally, I like using italicized thoughts, ’cause it helps draw a person into the head and italics make it easier for me to discern between characters – especially when there are multiple POVs. If I italicize something, I tend not to use “he thought” or “she wondered” unless it flows well and clarifies who’s talking. If I’m not…[Read more]

@noah-cochran,

*grins*

@the-inkspiller

but I use them to break up what would otherwise be a marathon of a sentence or two awkward dumplings sat in separate bathroom stalls.

Yep, that’s when I use them too, but I do find that just separating the sentences by starting the latter one with a conjunction is something authors do relatively often (instead of a semicolon that…[Read more]

@noah-cochran

It’s important to find your the right fit for your writing style! Not everything I say or give to you as advice is going to necessarily work with your vision, it’s simply my judgment based off the experience of what has worked for me for the stories I’ve tried to tell.

1. Semicolons

It’s true, I have been several times convicted…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

I understand the spirit of your example (expound more to make the telling more interesting), so I will keep that in mind, but the example itself doesn’t work at all–mostly due to the fact that Drastan himself is a mercenary. xD

@joelle-stone

Thanks for the response!

Yeaaaah… it’s usually best to avoid using “th…

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