Klein is with Zanar and Riure I guess. I missed @rose-colored-fancy‘s post and wrote him with them so he’s stuck. Which means that there is a shapeshifter on the loose.

@joelle-stone Yes, I did change the plot somewhat.  Forgot to clarify that, sorry.  And I do switch between Nadia and Ada a fair bit, but I make an effort to only pop into Nadia’s head (for reasons you’ll probably only learn at the very end of the story…).  And Ada is mute, so Nadia is always the one who does the talking.

Now for a third in…[Read more]

Hoiooooo

Esthelle’s story- cont.

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He pulled her to a wagon where many other young girls had been brought. That’s where she was placed, while many other guards continued to bring others.

Esthelle looked around, scanning a few of her wagon mates for recognition. She knew none.

One woman was quite pretty. She had dark hair and dark caram…[Read more]

@rebekah12,

First off, that is SO intriguing!! I can totally envision the slick deck and pelting rain. Your descriptions are vibrant and your dialogue realistic. But before I go rattling off, how detailed of a critique would you like?

@skylarynn,

Concerning description and stuff, your revised version was much better!

 Nadia sat relaxed on the…

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So, last time I did one of these, I got completely overwhelemed trying to critique everyone’s stories. So this go-round, if y’all are okay with it, I’ll just pick two or three to follow so that I can critique those as well as I can instead of giving you hasty and probably inaccurate ideas. Sorry if that hurts someone’s feelings. :/ I think I’m…[Read more]

@rebekah12,

Yurp, works for me!

@mischievous-thwapling,

*salutes* One question though: Ian ISN’T an Elf, right? Or is he? And you do want him in the prophecy, right?

*realizes that was three questions* *shrugs*

@mischievous-thwapling,

No worries! I do that sometimes on accident too. 🙂

Erm, personally I like the first two the best. Maybe we can combine them, though? Like have them play a board game without communicating with voices, then one of them accidentally does and they’re shrunk as punishment? XD I have no clue where that came from, but it…[Read more]

@mischievous-thwapling,

Ha, I was going to say that! (The “um” thing, that is.) And go straight ahead!

@kylie-wingfeather (and everyone else),

I have no clue what to do with Arundelle & Artham, so I await y’all’s lead! 🙂

Also her being royal is great. Most of the charas I’m working on are either royal or high class kids from different regions and they are all going to this same school

@erynne Okay.. sounds ciool.
I have many charas I need to work on, should I do a guy or girl?

@mischievious-thwapling Thanks! I’ll post another later tonight maybe.

@mischievous-thwapling,

Uh… *looks at Bekah* I think so?

@emma-walker, she’s a princess here’s her description:

Name: Eliana or Ellie (elly-on-a

Age: 17 or 18

Personality: ditzy (in a funny way-not in an annoying way), a total sweetheart, um… yeah that might be it for now. I’m really struggling to come up with a good personality for her that will make people really like her.

Physical description:…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Happy (late, very late) Easter!!!

@rebekah12 @birds-rock @ivi-hope and Joelle:

Do we still need this, since we’re moving to a different doc instead? (That is the plan, right???)

@rebekah12 @emma-walker

Nice to have you join us!! (Rebekah, chapter 57??!! *grins at you* W.O.W) I’ll try to critique in a bit (perhaps today or on Tuesday). And @skylarynn, yay, nice! I love how nicely you incorporated the critiques from earlier. *nods* I really like it and the new bit you posted! (As I said, I’ll try to critique later 🙂 )

*clears throat* *assumes Oskar N. Reteep-ish voice* In the words of our beloved Kylie S. Pierce: “Um…”

@joelle-stone @kylie-wingfeather

I call her Mama Meat because *pauses to glare at said mother, with whom I still have a squabble with* *continues* I call her Mama Meat because… because… I CAN AHA! *starts laughing* *realizes no on is…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy @jasmine

Love your guys’ riddles!! So cool 🙂

@joelle-stone

*realizes that you’ve probably been waiting for me to respond before continuing to some degree* *yelps* *hurries onto SE* OooooOOOooh, I like all of those options! *imagines a miniature Riure and Zanar running around* *bursts into snort-y giggles* *gets control of self* Which option on your list do you like the best?

Also, IDK if…[Read more]